Friday, November 1, 2013

Assignment # 14


Hawaii

The nightlife of people dancing in the sunset.
Bees swarming around the broken hive.


2 comments:

  1. This is lovely, although in terms of syllable counting, the second line has a few too many syllables to work as a true imitation. The imagery is fantastic though and adds lots of layers of meaning via all the reader's associations with bees and hives.

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  2. I take it you have been to Hawaii ... sounds like fun, I really want to vaca there some time :)

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